Jan Dean-Couldn't find any information on the poet!
and then i saw it
saw it all all the mess
and blood and everythink
and mam agenst the kichin dor
the flor all stiky
and the wall all wet
and red an dad besid the kitchen draw
i saw it saw it all
an wrot it down an ever word of it is tru
You must take care to write in sentences,
Check your spellings and your paragraphs.
Is this finished? It is rather short.
Perhaps next time you will have more to say.
This poem fascinates me! When I read it the first time, I was confused and had the same feelings as the teacher had, why were things mispelled? And why were the sentence structures so bad? If i only look at the structures and techniques i can tell that the poem is two stanzas, the first stanza has 9 lines and uses no punctuation marks. The second stanza is four lines and uses punctuation marks, also this stanza is in italics. I believe the italics are to express that a new point of view is being addressed and that a it is overlooking the first stanza. In a way the first stanza is the only stanza, and the teacher is writing her thoughts along with it. Looking at the poem as a metaphorical piece, it is easy to see that there is a deeper meaning that a young boy is trying to address. Underneath all of the misspelled words and unfinished sentences, a child is trying to tell the story of his dad possibly killing his mom. The teacher overlooks the terrible story by just paying attention to the structural detail. I think Dean wrote this poem as a over all metaphor because many teachers do over look pieces of work from students, or even conversations when there is a bigger picture of non-school related issues. Not you though Mrs. White!!!
